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Sam got up at six o'lock yersterday morning , after than ,he went to the park by bike.he had a great time in the park .he had a lunch with his parents in the Mcdonald's ,afternoon , he played basketball with his classmates from 4:00 untill 6:00.after dinner ,sam and his father went for a walk ,and his father bought a CD for him.what a nice day