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Sam gets up at six o 'clock yesterday. Then go to the park by bike, he had a good time in the park. Noon and parents eat lunch at McDonald's . Sam and his classmates in the school play basketball in the afternoon, play from 4 PM until at six o 'clock in the afternoon. Take a walk after dinner, Sam and his father , his father bought him a piece of classical music CDS. This day Sam had how interesting!