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Playing football is my favorite sport.I fell into love with playing football by chance.When I on the way to home ,I picked up a football,then I played with my friends.After that, I fell into love deeply with football.I usually train and play the match with my classmates.My favorite football star is Beckham.My hope is to be a professional football player.