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Thanks to the development of Internet,we can use electronic cards instead of the paper cards.There are a lot of advantages that the electronic cards have. For example,the electronic cards can give us not only pictures but also animation and sound.So electronic cards are more interesting than traditional cards. Sending electronic cards can be very quick.Also,there many websites and we can choose all kinds of electronic cards to send. If we aren't interested in the cards which the websites give,we can use flash or other software to design the cards by ourselves. As the electronic cards become popular day by day,people hardly ever use traditional cards.Further,electronic cards can be a great commitment to our environment.