作者词汇表达较为熟练,学术词汇使用不是很多;句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用。
My favorite sport Football is my favorite sport.It all begins when I was a little child. One night,I went home from school.On my way home,I found a football that someone lost.The next morning,I took it to my school and play with my friends,I really enjoy myself.From then on,I fall in love with this kind of sport. I often training and take part in all kinds of football matches with my classmates now.Up to now,we have won a lot of gold medals in the competition.Also,we have great many fans and become popular among students in our school. David Beckham is the football star who I love most.The only dream I have is to become a professional football player like him.