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In my classroom, we have a good monitor! Her name is Lili, she is 13 years old and she got a short hair. She is a clever girl and she is kind for everyone! She also wear a blue coat and she got most blue clothes. some students ask her:"why you usually wear blue color?" She only said she like blue!She got a big eyes, if she see some students not good, she will tell him that not good! She never angry with we! So we like her, she is a good monitor!!