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Sam got up at 6:00 yesterday. And then he rode a bike went to garden .He had a good time in the garden. He had lunch in McDonaid's with his parents in noon.Afternoon,Sam played basketball with his classmate in school. From 4p.m tilled 6p.m.After dinner,sam went for a walk with his father.His father bought a plece old music CD for him. Sam have a wonderful time.