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Tom shoulds get up at 6:00 every morning.He should go to school at 6:15 every day.He doesn't eat outside and doesn't listen to music on school.Besides,He shouldn't watch TV on school nights.What's more,He is going back home by 12:00 in the morning and by 9:20 in the evening.So this is Tom's rules.