单词拼写做的很好,请注意积累词汇量;若加强一些复杂句和从句的使用,文章会更棒;层次不够清晰,文中很少使用衔接词;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。
Tom shoulders get up at 6:00 every morning.He should go to school at 6:15.He doesn't eat outside and doesn't listen to music on school.Besides,He shouldn't watch TV on school nights.What's more,He is going back home by 12:00 in the morning and by 9:20 in the evening.So this is Tom's rules.