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Sam get up at six o'clock in the yesterday. Then go to park by bicycle. he is very happy to play in park. He have lunch with his mother in the McDonald's at noon. Sam play basketball with his friends in school at afternoon. From 4 o'clock at afternoon till 6 o'clock . Sam go for a walk with his father after dinner. the father buy a classical music CD for him. Sam spend very interest this day.