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Tom's rules Tom always get up at 6 o'clock in the morning every day,he often goes to school at 6:15 in the morning.he never don't eat outside and don't listen to music on school days and don't watch TV on school nights.he is back home by 12:00 in the morning and by 9:20 in the evening. This is Tom's rules.