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hello everybody: very glad to announce the news that professor libo will come to our university for speech. the topic of the speech is china spaceflight. at the 2:30 pm of the 5th Jan.,mr li will introduce the information of china spaceflight at the Lecture Hall. the information include the background of develop,a brife history, the development of the shenzhou series of spacecraft and the situation of the Chinese astronauts.