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Online shopping is became fashion.It is very convention and quickly. First,online shopping is much cheaper than on the mall. But it has many disadvantages and it's not safer to buy. So online shopping need to the safe website to buy,it can in the office website to buy it. So online shopping need to the safe website to buy,it can in the office website to buy it.
