单词拼写做的很好,请注意积累词汇量;正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;结构不严谨,行文不流畅;请注意分段;连词使用偏少;可以适当增加副词的使用。
Sam get up at 6 o'clock yesterday. then go to the park by bike.He had a good time in park. In noon he have a lunch with his parent McDonald's.He play basketball with his classmate in school.after dinner,he went for a walk with father.His father bought a CD for him.How fun a day of Sam.