文中单词拼写做的很棒,再多积累些词汇就更好了;正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;层次欠清晰,衔接成分很少;可以适当增加副词的使用;请提高文章内敛性,段落和句子要围绕主题展开。
One possible version: Pen pal wanted Hello,my name is Lucy King! My first name is lucy,and my last name is King.I am thirteen years old.I like English very mush,and I can speak English well.I am from the UK.It is good country.I am a sunny girl.I like to play sports every day,music and movies.What about you? I want to a pen pal in china.Because I like Chinese.Can you help me for chinese?I want to make pen pal with you!