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This a sunday ,sam get up at six o clock yesterday, and the he was going to park by bike, he was so happy with part becasue he play baskateball in part groud. he have lunch with his parents in McDonald's and he was playling baskateball whit his classmate in school at four o'clock to six o'clock.his father buy a classical CD for he when sam go for a walk with his father.that is a fun day.