初一英语作文模拟题:保护眼睛

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I think protect our eyes very important . protect our eyes ,we can less look the TV.we can look the far ,we must close the culture ,look the greed tree and other thing .we need active the eyes ,the can help eyes blood flow.and so on ,a some active is very good.