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yesterday sam wake up at 6. he take the bicicle go to park . he is have funny time in pake. at midday eat the mcdonald's with parents. afternoon with friend play basketball from 4 to 6 . have a dinner sam with he's farther go for a walk. he's farther by the cd to sam. today sam have a funny day.