若加强一些复杂句和从句的使用,文章会更棒;文中用词稍显贫乏,单词拼写还要加强;衔接词汇很少,建议加强过渡词和连接词的积累;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。
Tom get up at 6 and go to school at 6:15 . In that time he never eat outside food. On the school days he don't listen to music and don't watch tv on school nights. He was back home by 12 in the morning and by 9:20 inthe evening.