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Sam had got up at six o'clock yesterday, he had got to park by bike and played happily over-there. He and his parent having lunch in Mc Donald's. In the afternoon, Sam and his classmate were playing basketball from four o'clock till six o'clock. After dinner, Sam and his father were going for a walk and his father bought a CD which is a present to Sam. THis is an interesting day for Sam.
