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Sam had got up at six o'clock yesterday, then he got to park by bike and played happily over-there. He and his parent having lunch in Mc Donald's. In the afternoon, Sam and his classmate were playing basketball from four o'clock till six o'clock. After dinner, Sam was going for a walk with his father who had bought a CD to Sam for present. THis is an interested day for Sam.
