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Sam had got up at six o'clock yesterday, then he had got to park by bike and played happily over-there. He and his parent were having lunch in Mc Donald's. In the afternoon, Sam and his classmate had played basketball from four o'clock till six o'clock. After dinner, Sam and his father were going for a walk and his father had bought a CD to Sam. THis is an interested day for Sam.