初一英语作文模拟题:夏令营

词汇表达不够丰富，要增加学术词汇的使用；简单句偏多了；语言不流畅；连词使用偏少；请提高文章内敛性，段落和句子要围绕主题展开。

Poor spelling and handwriting. The topic is about your activities. Attention to the tense. Too many mistakes in basic usages of words. He is ten years old.he loves to watch tv.but for one full year he din't not watch tv at all and he played basketball with his friend in the afternoon he ate lunch