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Sam got up 6 o’clock yesterday morning.Then he rode a bike to the park.He played in the park was very happy. At noon, he and his parents to Macdonald to have lunch. After noon Sam and his schoolmate played basketball at school,from 4 o’clock to 6 o’clock. After dinner,Sam went to for a walk with your father together.His father bought a classical music CD for him. What a funny day for Sam!