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SAM get out of bed at six o'clock yesterday and then ride a bike go to a park ,he was very happly play at park .he had lunch with father and mother . sam was play basketball with he's classmates at school .from afternoon four clock till six clock. after dinner,sam was go for a walk with his father .he 's father buy a cd to him .sam was had a fun this day.The DN had the signature with manager on the next Tuesday.
