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laosi dumpling house have all kinds of dumpings ,all our dumplings are big and delicious. Two kinds of dumplings are cheaper than usual,dumplings with vegetable just cost you 2 yuan per 20,dumplings with beer and vegetable are 5 yuan per 20. Welcome to come here . our address is 234 Heping road .our telphone is:0373-2256.