作者能较灵活地使用词汇表达,但要多积累学术词汇;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;过渡词和衔接词使用不恰当,缺少组织,可适当增加连接词的使用;请注意分段。
Hello,everyone!My name is Yangkaixu.I'm a 13 years old boy. I live in the beautiful city of Tonghua. I'm an active,lovely and clever boy.In the school,My favourrite subject is maths perhaps some one thinks it's difficult to study well. But I like if.I believe that if you try your best everything can be done well. I also like sports very much Such as,running,volleyball and so on. I'm kind-hearted.If you need help, please come to me.i hope we can be good friends! OK.This is me,A sunny boy.