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Hi!My name is Lisa. I am twelve years old. I am a good student. And I am a girl. I am not handsome but I am very lovely. I am study is Tongjiang school. The school is very good and beautiful. I like it very much I have big eyes and my ears are big too.But my nose and mouth are small. So I look like lovely. My favorite sport is play basketball and table tennis. I think health is very importante. And I hope you healthy.