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Sam got up at six o'clock.Then he went to park by bike.he is very happy in park.His parents and he in Mcdonald's ate lunch.afternoon his classmates and he in school played basketball.from 4.00pm to till 6.00pm.after dinner,his father and he went for a walk .his father give he bought a music CD.sam has fun .