作者词汇积累很好,不过单词拼写方面要继续努力;不能熟练使用过渡词,文章结构不严谨;多多加强从句和复杂句的使用。
My favorite sport I'm habbit is play football.because piay football can improve our boby balance .Keep our from out of baiance . I'm fall in love paly football by chance.One day,i pick up a new football and my friends get together with me.i very happy as well as i interest about playing football so much. by the way , My classmate and i aways treak and games.I's for us to increas our friendship. I favorite spotmen is David Beckham. I have a dream. i want to becom a professional player like David Beckham.I wish i can favious for the pretty football skill.