句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;文章中拼写错误较多,同时请作者增加词汇丰富度;语言不流畅;请注意分段;连词使用偏少;可以适当增加副词的使用。
Sam got up at six oclock yesteday. Then he goes to school by bike and he has a good time . He and his parsent have lunch at MaDonald's. In the afternoon his friends and he played basteball in the school. In the dinner Sam and his father got for a walk togother ,then his father bought a classic CD Sam has a fun time in this day!