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Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday,then he went to the park by bike,he had a good time in the park,he ate Sichuan Cuisine with his parents for lunch,Sam played basketball with his classmates in the afternoon,they played it from 4:00pm until 6:00pm .After dinner,Sam went for a walk with his father,his father bought a dictionary CD for him.What a fun day Sam has!