请作者增加词汇丰富度;作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;衔接词汇很少,建议加强过渡词和连接词的积累;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。
Tom is a medium student,he has to follow many rules.In the morning,he has to get up at 6:00.Then he makes his bed,brushes his teeth and washes his face.He must go to shool at 6:15,because he can not late for school.At noon,he must eat at home,because he can not eat outside.And he has to comes back by 12:00 in the morning.On school days he can not listen to music, on school nights he can not watch TV and must comes back home by 9:20 .Tom is a good boy,he never break the rules.