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Yesterday Sam got up at six o'clock.Then he rode bike to park.He played happily in the park.And ate lunch with father and mother in McDonald' s.Sam and his classroom play basketball in the afternoon.They play basketball till six o'clock.After dinner Sam go for walk with his father.Father buy a music CD for him.What an interesting day is.