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Sam got up at six o'clock in the morning.After that.he rode his bike to the park, he had great fun playing in the park.Noon,he had lunch in the McDonald's with parents.In the Afternoon,Sam played basketball from four to six with his classmater.After dinner,Sam went for a wark with his farther,His farther bought a classical CD to him.This day,Sam feeled very happy!