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Sam got up at six o'clock. Then he rode the bike in the park, and had a good time. His parents and him had lunch in McDonald's. In the afternoon, Sam and his classmates played basketball at school from four p.m. to six p.m. After dinner, Sam and his father went for a walk, and his father bought his a classical CD. What a fun day!
