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Sam got up at six o'clock, yesterday. After that,he went to park by bike and he had a good time in the park. He had lunch in the McDonld's with his parents. In the afternoon, his classmates and he played basketball begin four o'clock till six o'clock. After dinner, Sam's father and he went for a walk. His father bought a classical music CD for him, because he likes music very much. Do you think Sam's yesterday is very interesting? What about you.Can you tell me something about it.
