单词拼写做的很好,请注意积累词汇量;但从句使用不熟练,注意平时练习中多积累;结构不严谨,行文不流畅;请注意分段;请提高文章内敛性,段落和句子要围绕主题展开;连词使用偏少。
Sam got up at 6 o'clock yesterday.Next he went to the park by bike. He had a good time in the park. Sam's parents and Sam went to McDonald's to have lunch at noon. In the afternoon, Sam played basketball with his classmate from 4 o'clock to 6 o'clock at the school. After supper, Sam went for a walk with his father. Sam's father bought a music CD for him. What's fun day for Sam.