单词拼写做的很棒,还请注意增加词汇的积累;正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词;请注意分段;可以适当增加副词的使用。
Yesterday is my busy day. I got up at half past six. Then I brushed my teeth and had breakfast. After that, I played Hulus and PaU. At noon, I had lunch and went shopping with my parents. Then my parents and I went for a walk and ran. We didn't have dinner. At last, I studied English and watched TV. What's busy day.