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Sam got up at 6 O'clock yesterday morning. And then he went to the park by bike.He felt so happy. At noon,he had lunch at McDonald's with his parents. After lunch,Sam played basketball from 4pm. till 6pm. with his friends in the school. He went for a walk with his father after supper.His father bought a classical misic CD for him.How wonderful a day for Sam!