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Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday morning. Then he went to the park by bicycle, he had a good time at the park. At noon, he and his parents had lunch in the McDonald's. Sam played the basketball with his classmates in the afternoon from 4 p.m. to 6 p.m. . After dinner, Sam and his father went for a walk, his father bought a classic CD for him. What a funny day !