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Tom's rules Tom is a good guy and he makes everything obey the rules. Everyday he gets up at 6:oo and go to school at 6:15. He never eats outside and never listens to music on school days. Tom doesn't watch TV on school nights. Moreover he will be back home by 12:00 in the morning and by 9:20 in the evening.