正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;文中词汇表达较丰富恰当,学术词汇使用稍显不足;衔接成分很少出现,文章结构欠严谨;可以适当增加副词的使用;连词使用偏少。
Sam got up at six yesterday. He rode his red bike to park for fun. The weather is cool, he fell very happy. Sam had lunch with his parents in McDonald's. He like eating fried chips and chicken. He played basketball with his classmates in the afternoon. they have played baksetball from PM4 till 6Pm. His Mom made a delicious supper for family. they all enjoy it. after supper, Sam with his father went for a walk and his father bought a classic music CD for him. He likes it very much. what a lovely day for Sam weekend.