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As a Chinese goes saying, "Eyes is a window for human's heart." wihtout eyes, we will in terrible dark and can't see anything. therefore, protect our eyes is an essential thing in our life. But how to protect our eyes? accoring to latest technology 's reseach, there are three basic rules we must to do if we want to protect our eyes. Firstly, we can't read a book long time. we need to have a rest for a while after we read books 30 minutes ago. secondly, we can't watch Tv or play Ipad too often, It will affect our eyesight and let us with short sight. Especially for children, parents need to control the playing time for their children. Thirdly, we try not to read books in the dark light. reading in Dark light, most of people know this, it will harm to our eyes without doubt. Last but not least, please always remind youself protect eyes is a very importan thing while you reading, watching and playing games in your daily life.