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As is known to all of us that doing exercise plays an important part in our daily life.So what's your favourite sport,my dear friends? I have been crazy about playing football games since I was young.I fell in love with football all by chance.I was on my way home with my friends that day when we saw a football.At first,we all didn't know what to do until one of my friends picked it up,we began to play with it. I found that playing football is full of fun so I always play it with my friends.We always play football after school and because my hardworking I play an important part in our team. My favourite football player is Beckham.He has set an example for me to encourage me to do better.I hope to become a famous professional football player like Beckham and I believe I can do it in the near future.