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My favorite sport is playing football. I became interested in football by chance. One day, I picked an football on my way home, and then played it with my friends. It was that moment that I fell in love with playing football deeply. I also have some classmates who have the same interests with me. So we often practice and organize a game together. Baker.Ham is the football star that I most like. My dream is to become to be a professional football player.