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Sam got up at six o`clock yesterday.Then he went to the park by bike,and he enjoy himself at there.He had his lunch in McDonald`s with his parents.In the afternoon Sam played basketball with his classmate from four o`clock till six o`clock.After the dinner,Sam and his father go for a walk together.His father bought him a classic music CD.How interesting a day did Sam have!