单词拼写做的很好,请注意积累词汇量;加强一些长句和复杂句的使用;层次不够清晰,文中很少使用衔接词;连词使用偏少。
Hello,everyone!I'm Tom.I'm unhappy,because I have a lot of rules. My dad tells me,I must get up at 6:00.And I go to school at 6:15.My mum tells me ,I can't eat outside.And I can't listen to music on school nights.I can't get home so late,too.So I have to back home by 12:00 in the morning and by 9:20 in the evening. Oh,my god!The rules are very terrible!