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Sam got up at six oclock yesterday. Then he rode bike to park ,he had a good time at park.At the noon,he ate McDonald with his family.In the afternoon,Sam played basktball with his classmates ,from four oclock to six oclock .After dinner ,Sam went for a walk with his father.Father bought a CD for Sam.What an interesting Sam had .