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Playing football is my favorite. I fell in love it by chance. One day, I picked up a football on my way home, I was so curious that I began to play it with my friends. Form then on I often play football with my classmates after class. We often train ourselves. In order to improve our skills, we compete in football games sometimes. One of the football stars whom I love is Beckham. It is not his handsome appearance but his skills. My dream is to become a professional football player in the future.